OHHH It's like butter now! So proud of the trailer rework! SO PROUD. It flows so well and it's AWESOME! ;)))) All the elements work so well together and there's no choppiness. Mmmm.
You'll get better responses now, definitely. Excellent work! I am blown away by how cool it is. Makes me wanna play it so bad now. I wanted to before, but now I NEED to. And THAT is what you want to go for with a trailer like this. The flow is what makes it, no question. So so good. Glad my minor editorial contribution helped out. That it turned out this well? Makes my day, man. Makes my day. Love this.
One minor note on the Author Comments:
WHOSE should be who've or who have. ;) gotta try to catch that type of case/usage/whatever error especially, no matter if it's in the actual game, the trailer or the Author Comments. It's even more imperative to have no errors in the Author Comments, as that is the main block of text people see right off the bat. ;) It's your face, so to speak. ;)
Anyway, have I said great job? ;) GREAT JOB.